"Big Room" Andrew Wyeth
They had the room for the afternoon. She placed flowers in a vase as the white sun flooded the room. A fireplace (will they need it?), fruit to slice and a clock to tick off minutes to the planned rendezvous in a ravaged city. She smoothed her dress and her hair and waited in a chair in the sun until the sun left the room. She lit the fire and opened the wine, and twirled a lock of hair until a clump came out in her hand. She waited for the soft tread of her lover, the scout; for his shadow to fill the door, but the only sound was the clock, the clock, the damned tock of the clock, and the shadows that lengthened were not of him. They took him by ambush to pry loose his secrets, but all they found was a photo, a date and a time.
Photo prompt is from Tess Kincaid at Magpie Tales where the links to other creative takes on the photo reside.
27 comments:
I like this. Really imaginative!
Yvonne, that was gorgeous! Well done!
... most poignant.
Enjoyed.
What a movie this is! So involving, I caught my breath..thank you...
makes you want to know more...?
Shades of The Highwayman here...dark and lovely...
oh so sad they took him...leaving her to wait...this def could be a much larger story....
So well written. So sad.
Loved this little story, lost in time. I loved it that no names were given, just two lovers headed for tragedy.
A brief glimpse into 'the day after'. Chilling.
Frances,
Thanks!!
Lydia,
Thank you so much.
Helen,
Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.
Tony,
Thank you!!
Lyn
A movie?! Thank you!
Kay,
It made me want to know more too! Thanks!
Tess,
Thank you and thanks for hosting.
Brian,
Thanks, I think it could be.
Liza,
Thanks.
Nino,
Thanks. No names need be revealed. Nice to meet a new blogger.
Dick,
And nice to meet you too! Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you liked it.
Wow! That ending is powerful. I really enjoyed your Mag lots.
Yowsa~ great take on this! I am sure she out twirled a lock of hair! -sad,
I could also relate to smoothing out the dress! thanks-
Lydia,
Thank you so much!
Izzy,
Thanks. I know it's what I'd do in similar circumstances. I'd probably be bald!
A captivating write Yvonne! Love this! :-)
Wonderful! Great take on the prompt. k.
Bones of a great story here. What ravaged the city?
Carrie,
Thank you so much! Smiles
Manicddaily,
Thank you!! Glad you liked.
Lucy,
Hi there! War is what I had in mind when I wrote this short piece. War, what is it good for?
Thank you for commenting. Maybe I can flesh this out into a short short....
story.:)
excellently composed.
Anna :o]
Anna,
Thank you!
A lovely piece!
Al,
Thanks!
LOVE! You've managed to weave a real sense of mystery and loss in just a few words.
You get so much emotion in so few words!! Love it :)
Talli and Jemi,
I forgot to say thanks.
Thank you!!!
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