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| Venus de Milo with Drawers, 1936, Salvador Dali |
At the age of twelve
I was instructed to wash my hands
when I got up in case
I'd touched myself in my sleep.
Curious at what I should be doing
but wasn't doing
I touched myself
here, here, and here.
Nobody else knows what they did
with my arms
but I can't touch myself
anymore.
The writing prompt comes to us from Magpie Tales,
A blog dedicated to writers and poets for the purpose of honing their craft. I hope you enjoyed my Magpie Tale. The Venus de Milo has always mystified me.
34 comments:
That was hilarious. Nice one :-)
Sly and smart. Enjoyable...
Anthony,
Thanks.
Berowne,
Thank you.
Amazing!
Reminds me of what a grandmother might tell a child! Amusing!
Laurie,
Thank you!!
Gerry,
Exactly. Thanks.
Chuckles! Growing up is fun, but they are not telling!
Hank
Oh this is something- what a take!
strangely I found it rather sinister.
thanks for sharing
Love it!
Your poem is great ... on so many levels!
Very thought provoking!
That was clever!
I thought the beginning was darkly funny, and then it wasn't funny at all. It was sad, and it made me think about women's sexuality and how it is viewed. (I don't know if you can tell, but I liked it.) I feel sad and uncomfortable, and I'll probably be thinking about this for a while.
Oh, I found this much more sad than funny. It makes me think of far too many repressive parents and guilt ridden children.
A lovely fun read!
A lovely fun read!
very cleverly done. and yes, as kids, we were told ... not much...
Hank,
Thanks!
Izzy,
Thank you.
Martine,
Not strange at all. Thanks.
Frances,
Thanks!
Thank you, Helen.
Wendy,
Thanks so much.
Hi Alex!
Thank you.
Heidi,
That is exactly what I wanted people to feel and think about. So I was successful. Thank you.
Other Mary,
Yeah, "Mother's going to put all her fears into me." Thank you.
Karen,
Thank you.
Lady Read,
Thanks!
You've made a powerful statement here!!
Have to say I laughed out loud! Then I got sad - well done!
Margaret,
Thanks so much.
Jemi,
Hi. I know...I've gotten some mixed responses on this one.
Oh! So brief but with a glimpse into something really disturbing. You touched a morbid nerve here.
Great response to the prompt. It's funny about instructions given to the young, assuming guilt when many have no idea what it is they're supposed to have done...
Ethan,
Hi! Thank you. I'm glad it moved you to comment:)
Turtle,
Yes. We do all of that. Thank you so much.
darkly funny- amazing how some kids were raised.
Intimate. Smart. Loved it...
Kathy,
Thanks.
Tess,
Thank you! And thanks for these amazing prompts.
Excellent write - love it.
Anna :o]
Hi Anna,
Thank you!!
Freud would have a field day with this. ;)
Nessa,
Ha! He'd probably try to put me in a "sanitarium"!
Shocking! (in a brilliantly-written-sort-of-way!)
Lydia,
why...thank you. Thanks a bunch for commenting.
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