Three whitetails paw the earth,
ignore scarecrow.
Heads lift
to danger, nostrils flare.
Breath
plumes in the morning air.
Crow
feeds in the middle of the road,
red hawk circles
the coop and dives for a kill.
Two whitetails
dash over the misty field,
like schooners
escaping under full sail.
The scarecrow has no face.
This is a Friday Flash 55, the weekly writing exercise sponsored by the G-Man, aka Mr. Knowitall. If you have a story to tell in 55 words, let the Maestro-of-Flash know.
Happy Halloween
22 comments:
I often wonder how scary animals / birds find scarecrows. They don't seem very scary to me!!
Nice poem Yvonne! Some birds certainly seem to have no fear of scarecrows.
maybe that is why they are not scared...i have a whole family of deer that live in the back yard...i like all the life you captured around the scarecrow...
Geez Yvonne, I don't know what you guys are talking about, this seems pretty scary to me! A faceless Scarecrow gives me the Creeps.
I Loved your Murder of Crows 55
Thanks for playing, I'm so happy to see you...:-)
Thanks for your great support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Mary,
Scarecrows give me the creeps! Thanks!
Gabriella,
Thank you!
Brian,
The deer around here aren't scared of anything. Thank you so much!
G-Man,
I should've called it that! Thank you so much. This is fun. Have a great weekend!
Oh, this was the best kind of creepy because it's real. Loved it, Yvonne!
I really enjoyed reading this poem! Well done. It is so soft and hesitantly gentle - and that's what gives it that extra pop of creepy as you describe your subjects. Wow. Really a very nice 55!
Love the last line. It made the whole thing pretty creepy. Good write.
Talon,
What's real all around us is sometimes enough to give us the shivers. Thanks!!
Margaret,
Thank you so much. That's a really thoughtful comment. I like it when I can create an extra "pop". Thanks.
Myrna,
I hestitated about the title matching the last line but I think it works. Thank you!!
A beautiful encapsulation, Yvonne.
I can see it all in my mind, just as clear as day.
I can picture it perfectly. And your last line adds so very much. Wonderful 55!
I love the full-sail line. Gives me a vivid image.
An ominous mood in this, very suited to the season--do the deer run because of the face-facsimile, or because the face isn't there, or from some terror they sense beneath it all. Quite spooky, I think, and an excellent 55.
Suppose the deer look at the scarecrow as a watchman to keep them safe. They certainly don't seem to keep the deer away.
Wonderful fall 55!
Not having a face is indeed scary for a scarecrow methinks.
A monster without a face. We also have such monsters in our lives. Interesting write; I liked the setting of your poem. Enjoyable read! :-)
-HA
well captured - the hawk of the whitetail, and you of the scene ~ M
I was there! So visual!
Scarecrows can be so creepy! Nicely done :)
I love this autumn visual. I doubt having a face on the scarecrow would change much, though.
This is so stark.
Thanks everyone!
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