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Monday, January 14, 2013

The Mole - Magpie Tales



 

In training for the veil,
she nails the claustrophobia

but mourns the loss of her peripheral
vision, the dance classes and the wind

in her hair. She sips life through a straw
like one trapped under ice and practices

the art of being servile. They say she is lucky
to be one of but three to share his house.

She should have married Jesus
while she had the chance and slept alone.

She peers through her nose hole
and imagines life in a bell jar, contained.
 
 
 
Image comes to us from Tess at Magpie Tales, a blog to nourish the muse, one dedicated to the enjoyment of poets and writers, but I take responsibility for the rest. Tess's poem can be found here.
 

28 comments:

Anonymous said...

Gracious, how you think!

I could nearly weep for this poor soul.

Berowne said...

Singular and offbeat - well done.

Frances Garrood said...

Really clever, Yvonne!

Helen said...

Yvonne ... I think your poem is amazing.

Anonymous said...

Hello. Wow this is lovely. Great poem well done.
Xx

Susan Anderson said...

Powerful and unique take.

=)

izzy said...

Trapped under ice is scary- I like what you did with this!

Jemi Fraser said...

Wow! Creepy, sad, scary and awesome!

The Write Girl said...

She is ensnared in a scary world. What an emotional and heartbreaking piece and beautifully written.

Gail said...

Very interesting take. Well cone.

Kathe W. said...

excellent take- tense, scary and sad.....is there no escape?

Yvonne Osborne said...

Rebelle,
Thank you.

Berowne,
Thanks so much!

Frances,
Well, if you say so it must be!

Helen,
Thanks.

Michelle,
Thank youXXX

Sue,
Thanks so much!!

Izzy,
Thanks. I think that would be the worst.

Write Girl,
Thank you so much.

Gail,
Thank you. Appreciate it.

Kathe,
Thanks. For too many, I'd say that's a big no.


Jemi,
Thank you! Thank you!

anthonynorth said...

Beautifully surreal.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Anthony,
Thank you!

~T~ said...

Very interesting. Well done.

Anonymous said...

Well done indeed! And the image you chose was simply perfect.

Nessa said...

First, that picture is creepy.

Second, wonderful words. They're kind of creepy, too. I feel very closed in and closed off.

Magaly Guerrero said...

Oh wow, the feeling of loss... the lack of Independence is thick and loud in each word.

Yvonne Osborne said...

T.,
Hi and thanks!

Wendy,
Tahnk you. The image was provided by Tess at Magpie Tales.

Nessa,
Yeah, it is creepy in a way, isn't it? Closed in and closed off, that's how you're supposed to feel. Thanks!

Magaly,
Hi! Nice to meet you! Thanks so much for your thoughts on this..."loss of independence". That's it in a nutshell.

L. Diane Wolfe said...

I don't know what you call that outfit, but it's creepy. Very clever with the poem.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Diane,
Thanks! It is creepy, thus a good choice for discussion, I guess.

Jinksy said...

You encapsulated all that was disturbing about this image - excellent piece.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Jinksy,
Thank you so much.

Sienna said...

in training for her veil INDEED....Brilliant.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Sienna,
Hi! Thank you so much. I appreciate it.

Susan said...

This is beautiful. I'm joining your blog site. Nice writing. Now onto your 55 Friday!

Susan said...
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Yvonne Osborne said...

Susan,
Hi and thanks so much!! I love new followers.