In training for the veil,
she nails the claustrophobia
but mourns the loss of her peripheral
vision, the dance classes and the wind
in her hair. She sips life through a straw
like one trapped under ice and practices
the art of being servile. They say she is lucky
to be one of but three to share his house.
She should have married Jesus
while she had the chance and slept alone.
She peers through her nose hole
and imagines life in a bell jar, contained.
Image comes to us from Tess at Magpie Tales, a blog to nourish the muse, one dedicated to the enjoyment of poets and writers, but I take responsibility for the rest. Tess's poem can be found here.
28 comments:
Gracious, how you think!
I could nearly weep for this poor soul.
Singular and offbeat - well done.
Really clever, Yvonne!
Yvonne ... I think your poem is amazing.
Hello. Wow this is lovely. Great poem well done.
Xx
Powerful and unique take.
=)
Trapped under ice is scary- I like what you did with this!
Wow! Creepy, sad, scary and awesome!
She is ensnared in a scary world. What an emotional and heartbreaking piece and beautifully written.
Very interesting take. Well cone.
excellent take- tense, scary and sad.....is there no escape?
Rebelle,
Thank you.
Berowne,
Thanks so much!
Frances,
Well, if you say so it must be!
Helen,
Thanks.
Michelle,
Thank youXXX
Sue,
Thanks so much!!
Izzy,
Thanks. I think that would be the worst.
Write Girl,
Thank you so much.
Gail,
Thank you. Appreciate it.
Kathe,
Thanks. For too many, I'd say that's a big no.
Jemi,
Thank you! Thank you!
Beautifully surreal.
Anthony,
Thank you!
Very interesting. Well done.
Well done indeed! And the image you chose was simply perfect.
First, that picture is creepy.
Second, wonderful words. They're kind of creepy, too. I feel very closed in and closed off.
Oh wow, the feeling of loss... the lack of Independence is thick and loud in each word.
T.,
Hi and thanks!
Wendy,
Tahnk you. The image was provided by Tess at Magpie Tales.
Nessa,
Yeah, it is creepy in a way, isn't it? Closed in and closed off, that's how you're supposed to feel. Thanks!
Magaly,
Hi! Nice to meet you! Thanks so much for your thoughts on this..."loss of independence". That's it in a nutshell.
I don't know what you call that outfit, but it's creepy. Very clever with the poem.
Diane,
Thanks! It is creepy, thus a good choice for discussion, I guess.
You encapsulated all that was disturbing about this image - excellent piece.
Jinksy,
Thank you so much.
in training for her veil INDEED....Brilliant.
Sienna,
Hi! Thank you so much. I appreciate it.
This is beautiful. I'm joining your blog site. Nice writing. Now onto your 55 Friday!
Susan,
Hi and thanks so much!! I love new followers.
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