DRINKING A DEAD MAN’S BEER
Someone poured a stein for the deceased
and set it on the mantle.
It had warmed but wasn’t flat.
The sun danced off the lake
which should have been ice-covered
but was bare as the hands wrapped in a rosary.
Let them wonder that you walked
amongst their grieving
and finished your final beer unfettered.
I thank the G-Man for providing an outlet for 55 of my wayward words come Friday. And let's remember that this is supposed to be fiction. I wouldn't want you to think I'd actually do such a thing.
TGIF. Keep warm and in good company.
28 comments:
The sun danced off the lake
which should have been ice-covered
but was bare as the hands wrapped in a rosary.
love that description...this is another excellent piece...
Bottom's Up!
I loved this Yvonne, very moving.
Excellent 55.
Thank you so much for returning to the Friday Funfest, and please have a Kick Ass Week-End
Enjoyed..
I could see it happening by accident, should the beer have been encompassed in a party at some point.
Invisible ghost imbiber? You strain our capacity to believe, let alone any mourners... LOL
You have an amazing way with imagery. Your details are so evocative. Well done...as always.
Great I really enjoyed this! whole thing-
The imagery in this is excellent.
Very moving 55, I like it very much.
This is excellent! "Bare as the hands wrapped in a rosary" is really striking.
Just lovely. Very very vivid, very poignant, but with a kind and light sweetness. Thanks. K.
Great piece. Love everything about it.
Thank you everyone. I appreciate each and every comment more than you may know.
Everyone grieves differently. Well done.
Subtle and rich, and nicely nuanced. A very effective and expressive use of 55 words.
Quite enjoyed that.
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Love that image of lake and the rosary beads. I think drinking warm beer would make a ghost of you. :)
Really good one Yvonne! I too really like the descriptive phrases, and I love the idea of everyone seeing the empty beer and wondering!
Yvonne...
Every week there is always someone that helps me make the 55 er's feel welcome. Of course Brian is the most helpful, but this week your support was immeasurable.
Thank You from the bottom of my heart... Galen
Thanks again to all who dropped me a note. Mary, that's it exactly. You know, like an Irish wake where they actually expect even the dead to have a nip.
Galen,
You're very welcome. I enjoyed it.
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Omicroron,
Thank you.
Nice! I hope everyone gets the chance to have that final drink :)
Drinking a toast with the deceased is a pretty fine way to keep their spirits alive though Yvonne. I have been there done that & known that the folks that I toast are smiling right along with me (and catching those tears before they spoil the stein).
Jemi and Katherine,
Thank you both. Yes, a toast is a fine way to say goodbye.
I don't think I like this new blogger comment page. Why do they keep changing things?? Don't they know what creatures of habit writers are?
Jemi and Katherine,
Thank you both. Yes, a toast is a fine way to say goodbye.
I don't think I like this new blogger comment page. Why do they keep changing things?? Don't they know what creatures of habit writers are?
Love this, made me chuckle. Great piece!
Steve,
Hey....thanks!
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