She bought a sarong in Venice where everyone is beautiful
though the surf smells and seagulls scour the tideline.
though the surf smells and seagulls scour the tideline.
All along the shore the ocean unfurls its soul.
Beer with salty clams to peel, dip, and swallow.
The bar faces the ocean with a poolroom where poets rhyme.
She bought a sarong in Venice where everyone is beautiful.
One size fits all with three ways to fold, wrap, and tie.
In Venice, where guitarists skate the boulevard
all along the shoreline the ocean unfurls its soul.
Sea birds ply ocean weed, piles of shell, and salty form.
Bougainvillea drapes the cafes. She collects all she finds.
She bought a sarong in Venice where everyone is beautiful.
She took the ocean home - salt, shells and sun coils.
Maybe he'll come over with a hank of garden lettuce or another sign.
Because all along the shoreline the ocean uncurled its soul.
On the whisper of her sarong she crosses the wooden floor
and watches him cut grass, sun on his shoulders, tasting salty brine.
She bought a sarong in Venice where everyone is beautiful
and all along the shoreline the ocean unfurls its soul.
Tasked with the challenge from Poets & Storytellers to write a poem about a sensual piece of clothing, I immediately thought of a trip to Venice Beach where the beach was littered with what the ocean didn't need, where sarongs were as popular as sun hats and, yes, where everyone was beautiful.
18 comments:
Love the lines from the beginning repeated at the end. It really works, you feel you are there. Well done.
Romance and Venice and a sarong definitely need a Villanelle...!!!! A potent mix!
Not only does the the ocean unfurls its soul ~~ so does the sarong, my dear.
Helen, you made me laugh! Yes, the sarong does indeed come unfurled.:)
Rajani,
Thanks! I agree, the subject was a natural for the villanelle.
Alan,
Thank you! I wish I was there again right now!
Now this is a sensuous poem about clothing.
I think that all "along the shoreline the ocean unfurls its soul" are jealous of her.
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Oh, this villanelle is gorgeous! But I'm glad of your notes as I was thinking all the way through of the Italian Venice and was a bit puzzled, not able to place sarongs there. Venice Beach USA makes a lot more sense. (And the sarong is my own favourite summer wear.)
Sarong denotes freedom from ever tight fit including our social roles!
Vanderloost,
Yes, freedom comes in many colors and folds if we are to escape societal roles. Thanks for commenting!
Rosemary,
Thank you! I didn't even think of the other Venice, having never been there, but on a more global scale I can see where Venice Italy is better known, so I'm glad I added the footnote. Thanks for the prompt and I agree, nothing can make us feel sexier and freer than a sarong!
Priscilla,
Thanks!
Jim,
Smiles.....thanks for commenting.
Enjoyed the escape, and long ago visit.
I was enjoying a beer as I read your poem. Good timing.
Anthony,
Thanks!!
Ollie,
Sounds good to me too! Thanks.
I've never been to either Venice, LOL. But you definitely set the scene well, reminding me of days spent by the NJ shore. Not everyone in Wildwood is pretty though.
Hi Rommy!
Thanks! Funny, about Wildwood. The Venice Beach scene just casts everyone in a better light.
Love teh way you repeated the line through this poem. A lovely cadence.
Hi J Cosmo!!
Lovely to meet you and now I want a glass of wine. Ahh, better settle for coffee as the sun has barely cleared the horizon. Thank you for commenting!! The villanelle has always been a favorite of mine. The trick is finding a line that bears repeat.
The repetitive lines work so beautifully here, Yvonne!
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