In the fog, the strobe lights on the bus
alert the children.
In the fog, a figure leaves the forest
and waits at the edge of the clearing
to watch as the child who will never know him
climbs the steps with his Spiderman lunchbox.
In the fog, it’s as if he wasn’t even there.
A thank you to Galen, the kick-ass host at Mr. Knowitall who orchestrates the Friday Flash 55 event. If you have a story you can tell us in 55 words, tell him first. See you on the other side of 2011!
19 comments:
Yvonne?
This is WAY Spooky for Christmas!!
Spellbinding though!
Hopefully I can keep you around Friday's till Spring...This Rocked!
Have a Kick Ass 2011....G
We've certainly had a lot of fog around here lately. Nice 55!
I wish I knew the story you thought of to come up with this. Excellent.
A wonderful story… I filled in the unnecessary details as I read. So sad… Thank you
Sounds like the beginning (or the end) of a sad movie. Well-described 55!
oh lord...this is rather ominous...and a bit scary...shivers...nice 55 though...
Isn't it weird, how you can say "Spiderman Lunchbox" and it is already a Stephen King novel to me...the formation, the tension, the metal cubical left behind a boy?
oooooo, I love the bittersweetness of this. I see it as a father who can only see his child from afar. Beautiful and otherwordly.
May your new year be fantastic, Yvonne.
This gave me chills!
A father creeping through the fog, watching a child who doesn't know him is a very scary story.
There are so many possibilities for this story. Galen is thinking spooky, and I am thinking sad, a father who will only watch his child from afar.
Happy New Year!
Hmm my imagination went many directions. I understand the fog and how it can hide so much
Happy New Year
Moon hugs
And some people live life in a fog! LOL.:)
Sad to be the one who's unseen and forgotten. Eloquent.
Mine's up.
Love how the title is the only place you mention father - well done! :)
very nice 55! yes I am that Susie, but I am retired from 55ing due to work! of course, I didnt invent it or anythng, just reintroduced it.
Happy New Year!
your 55 gave me some shivers - but i really like the spiderman lunchbox...nice
Galen,
Thanks. Things should be subdued now through the next equinox.
Teresa,
Thank you very much.
Liza,
Thank you.
Anthony,
No...thank you!
Eric,
Thanks! I guess it could be that.
Brian,
Hey....didn't mean for it to be scary actually. Thanks.
Annie,
Thank you. He's a pretty awesome writer to be compared to in any small way. Thanks for all your support.
Tricia,
Hi! Thank you so much. Yes, may 2011 be a wonderful year for you too!
Mama,
Thank you.
Rosaria,
Thanks for commenting on my last post of the year!
Quilly,
Thanks. I guess there is a little of both.
Moon,
Thank you very much!
Cad,
And they like it that way. Thanks for commenting.
Cheryl,
That's it exactly. Thank you.
Jemi,
Thanks for noticing that! Have a Happy New Year!
Susie,
How very nice to meet you! Thank you for commenting on my 55. That means a lot. Have a great New Year!
Claudia,
Thanks! I thought I needed a concrete image at the end.
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