Beets simmer in the pot
as the sun burns a path
through the archetypal mist of dawn.
Ferns hang limpid in the dew
and cattle low from the hilltop.
Mary hangs sheets from the line in her underwear
shaking out love from the folds.
Penning a poem of just 44 words to make up a Quadrille for dVerse, the pub where poets hang out.
For Quadrille #157 the only other requirement is the inclusion of some form of the word type. I may have stretched that a bit. Check out the pub!!
18 comments:
Love the many layers of this, and the images that flash from placid, pastoral, chocolate box to the slap of everyday love
A summer type. Nice one Yvonne.
Thanks for dropping by to read mine
Muchđź’–love
Love it. Especially the visuals the words create..
Oh, that last line is just fantastic! And this:
"the sun burns a path"
Such vivid imagery here. Well done!
So wonderful images--and I love that last line!
Great use of imagery!
That close was killer, burning a dusky image in my mind, a lady in black underwear, beating those sheets with and of love.
Very vivid imagery.
How lovely! Great imagery!
Vivid, whimsical images packed so neatly into 44 words.
Quadrilliffic! Thanks.
Yvonne--
She is a person who has her own slice of heaven. Is that lake shot near where you live? You mentioned Michigan in your side bar. Good place to enjoy paradise in any season.
Li/Lisa
Yvonne - those last two lines are an entire world unto themselves - I'm tempted to incorporate them into a poem of my own somehow... Simply amazing.
Much love,
David [ben Alexander]
http://skepticskaddish.com/
Ms Lili, Yes, the lake is near us. Lake Huron! As a matter of fact, I swam in it yesterday and almost lost my glasses, forgot I had them on when I dived in. Lost in the moment!!
David, I'm honored you're tempted!! Thanks
From everyday domestic to profound symbolism with the sun, pastoral bliss to an intriguing love affair, I love how you quickly change scenes in this. Great quadrille, Yvonne. It's hard to write like this, and also make it easy enough for someone like me to understand.
-Tanmay
Hi Tammy,
What a lovely heart-lifting compliment. Thank you!
Mary in her underwear hanging out the sheets is a great image.....I love quotidian poetry....there is a lot of magic in the every day
Rall,
Thank you! You're right, magic in the little moments that so often go unnoticed. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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