Inspired by the prompt at Poets and Storytellers to go micro . . .
The night bird
rustles
midst the snow-burdened branches
of his hidden home.
Smog colored sunrise
of busy men—rich cerise
for their artless ways.
On the snow fog morn
white lights dance around the nest
of winter’s cardinal.
A traditional Japanese form, haiku is a three-line poem written in a 5/7/5 syllable count, usually with a focus on nature. Thanks, Rosemary, for including the other forms of micro poetry in the prompt. Less is often more!
10 comments:
Beautiful words! I like the last one best of all: the contrast between the white lights and the (unstated but well-known) red of the cardinal. Beautiful use of an evocative image that speaks instantly to readers.
Yvonne, my favorite will be the first although they all begged my vote. Not the Poem so much as the idea a "hidden home" which all birds really need.
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I especially like being left with that image of the cardinal.
Like the wintery visual impression they present.
Rosemary,
Thanks. I figured no description is necessary for a cardinal. Interestingly we just watched a series (murder mystery) called Cardinal on Hulu. Can't get it out of my head. (Seeing red!)
Thanks Jim!
The other morning, predawn, I caught movement inside the arborvitae and it startled me until I realized it had to be a bird.
Colleen,
Thanks so much! They are Christmas birds.
I like them all--such vivid imagery--and the last one is my favorite. I can see the red... fighting off the fog.
All rich haiku of this season.
my favourite must be the second one. All sunrises, no matter how we pollute the air, always surprises us with a rich red.
I can see your winter birds, the fog, frost and cold...
Magaly,
Thank you
dsnake,
Thanks for voting for #2! Ironically, pollution makes the sunrise and sunset more brilliant.
JM Beames,
Thank you!!
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Thanks and happy New Year.
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